Wednesday 11 November 2020

world f ice

 Once upon a time there was an ice queen could ice cream she loved freezing stuff.she mostly likes freezing red leaves but she accidentally got lost in the  world of ice.it became dark. She heard two voices in the background. It was a girl group, their names were Rose,Summer and Imogen. They were lost too. Then in two hours they escaped.they wanted to be ice queens too.So ice cream gave them a potion to drink.then in five seconds they turned into ice queens. Then they went to the ice castle and lived happily ever after again



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2 comments:

  1. Kia ora Carys,
    I really liked your story especially the way that the story had a beginning, middle and end when they all lived happily together.
    I really enjoyed when you used descriptive language like freezing. What was in the potion?
    Nga mihi,
    Mark

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  2. Kia ora Mark
    The things in the potion were ice, salt and leaves.Thanks for commenting on my post. From Carys.

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